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@sarah2014blue I'm so sorry for the late reply.

I'll love to get a feedback.
Thank you 😊

My feedback is try and write without rhyme. What sometimes happens when we try to rhyme, is that we focus on rhyming and we forget the purpose of the poem, which is it to carry meaning.

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I am so happy, finally, I get criticized constructively.

Thank you so much for the feedback, I'll surely give a thorough consideration to what you've suggested

You’re very welcome!

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