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RE: Pounded by Ezra: trite, cliche, and boring; aiming at the object.

in #writing7 years ago

Regarding "Keats is dead..." first time you wrote about that o read it and say ok its good but... as long as you refer more times it i said: eyyy this girl insists in that so... you are losing things for sure!
I like your analysis of that two lines and how a few words can start so many thoughts, feelingd anddddd images!!
So i'm reading it and... i will read it tomorrow and the day after tomorrow, i like how the words and thought and images are spinned.
Its like a hand that moves slowly and sensual throught your body while some ideas and arguments are said until it becomes to a more sensitive part of body and an direct sensation are sent throw more explicit sexual words, it make the intensity grows for continue towards other part slowly and sensual with other arguments.
Regarding "wheelbarrows" its too minimalist for me, perhaps because i always have read prose. I need more words for appreciate beauty in a text, when i read the text its like i'm watching powerpoint slides of images with a second of difference, or one of those old movies that are composed by photograms.

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A lot of he “Keats ....” poem is referencing dead authors of poetry. Laced through are graphic sexual images that, according to the author are attempting to describe Carpe diem.

My favorite are the unexpected Combinations of socks and how they’re related.

I like your description of how the hand moves slowly throughout your body until it becomes more sensitive I really enjoyed that combinations of sex and how they’re related.

I like your description of how the hand move slowly throughout your body until it becomes more sensitive I really enjoyed that. Part of your comment.

The red wheelbarrow poem is extremely minimalist. It is literally the definition of minimal portrait. It is an excellent example of pure images, and nothing more. The whole poem relies on the first line, “so much depends upon”.

You described it perfectly, actually, it was exactly like watching a PowerPoint image. It is exactly like watching an old movie but it’s just a bunch of pictures. That is the entire time, and meeting is going through the users observation of those pictures.

As always, thank you for your insightful comment and trust. Know that I do not recommend things lightly.