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RE: Air-Clinic SMT Update: Full Steem Integration, Steem Connect Login, AIRCOIN Token Airdrops, Roadmap ...

in #air-clinic6 years ago

This is a very impressive update. Air-Clinic is certainly an ambitious project.

I do have some issues, though. One relating to content and others relating to style, grammar, and proofreading.

On the content side, I wish you would make your plans regarding the health insurance aspects of the service clearer. You say here, and in your app, that the service allows payment for offline medical treatment. It is unclear how and where those services are or will be available.

On the presentation side, I'll cite some examples of the issues I had:

  • "This current model totally incorporates the Steem blockchain and her community ." Steem is non gendered, at least in English. "its" would be the appropriate word there. Also, there's a needless space before the period at the end there.

  • "This gives opportunity to all Steem users" is clunky. I would use "This gives Steem users an opportunity to" instead.

  • "We don't censor your health status provided that it's free of plagiarism and reasonable" lacks a comma after "status." Without it, on a first read, one gets the impression that you meant to write about the status being provided.

Thank you for your contribution. I look forward to the next one.

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Thank you for your review, @didic!

So far this week you've reviewed 19 contributions. Keep up the good work!