Your writing is fantastic man, I actually only spotted one error in the whole thing, and as a former English major (dropout) I tend to notice them. You missed a single comma in the whole piece. And that could merely have been a typo.

Excellent work. Again, the mark of a good writer is painting pictures with words and I saw you park your car and leave it in my head. I felt your feelings about the shabby parking location and could relate from parking in big cities myself, in sketchy locations.

THAT is the goal, and you nailed it.