I worked through it- the second crit. Thanks for your effort, I'm seeing flaws in my delivery through your eyes. POV errors etc. I'm torn between writing quickly to get the story out and taking my time to line edit in a re-write.
My new plan: write it quickly and let it sit for a day or two. Re-read and edit before I post to avoid the red ink of doom. Laughing.
How does that sound?
Hugs,
J.