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RE: Finish the Fiction Story Contest - WEEK #10

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I'll join!!! Seems really interesting!
Btw thanks for making such an awesome contest

Here it goes
As Penelope slept, she heard strange creaky sounds coming from the closet, she heard voices and some weird laughs.
She thought that it was just part of her dream, so once she woke up, she thought everything was normal like nothing changed, she slowly opened the closet and found a piece of paper with something written on it, it looked like some childish drawing of her family with an x on each one of them.
After seeing the drawing she felt frightened and slowly looked at the dolls, nothing was wrong but she felt like something was, she closes the closet and tries to remember what her father had said, she kept walking back and forth over and over until the door opened! Her heart stopped as she tries to catch her breath, It was just her husband with their son and cupcake, she looked into their eyes with fright and delight at the same time, Charles asked, is everything ok?
She replied, uhmm yes everything is fine, I just didn't realize it was u guys.
Penelope tried to keep it to herself and solve it alone.. So she seperated Hans with the other dolls as she put the old dolls in a box where she decided to bury it somewhere around a near by park.
She went to the park and dug up a hole for it and buried the box as quick as possible , she took a breath of relief as she was walking home, she felt great and all cheered up, then she went and looked at Hans inside the closet there was another note in the dolls hands, saying ''we'll be back".

That's it! Haha it was quite short and I apologize but thanks for the opportunity!

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Welcome to the contest @jysui! Don't apologize for the lenght, it was ne suggesting a 500 words limit and therefore this contest has already rewarded very short stories, as long as they show originality. Yours is a well made traditional horror novel idea, I enjoyed it a lot. Keep it up and keep playing with us!

She should have sold them on E-bay years before! Evil drawing dolls!

The note was a nice touch, I was wondering if her family was coming back. Nice job!

Wow thanks!!! I know I'm not that good as a plot writer but I'm glad u guys liked it

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