The Twenty Eight Minute, 5-Minute Freewrite ~ Day 466~ Prompt: Cookie Cutter~ Original Story, Original Writing, And Even The Photo Too ~
~Sometimes, You Just Gotta Finish The Story~
Tuesday's Prompt: Cookie Cutter
Whrrrrr.
Schnick.
Schnick.
Schnick Schnick.
Sadge stood at the belt, small knife in hand, slicing away at anything that didn't look like a cat in the wet dough, zipping by his station on the long conveyor line. Cookies, cookies, COOKIES. Glorious, sugar-brown cookies. Row after row, day after day, week after week, month after month, year after year, the time just kept rolling along like the flour-based cookie blanks, now suddenly motionless on the belt in front of him. The line was dead. The small red light at Station 1 was spinning, way over in the corner of the enormous warehouse, as the alarm horn blared the BLATANTLY obvious. The line is dead! There would be no more cookies heading for the big ovens now.
“What's up?” It was Vern, shouting over the annoying horn from his station on Belt 6. He wasn't that great of a 'cutter', but his uncle worked upstairs, so he got the job anyway. Sadge thought aloud, “his cats look more like a sad possum, than a feline. But no one seems to notice. Or care.”
Vern still had his arms raised in a standard 'what's up' posture. Sadge shrugged in his direction, then shouted, “I dunno. Maybe not enough butter again?” Like last Thursday. You'd think Old Fredd could get it right. How hard can it be, after 19 years. You dump the 700 pounds in the hopper every hour, like clockwork. Vern shook his head in disbelief or indifference, it was hard to tell the two apart, then turned back toward his side of the line.
Twenty seven years on the conveyor, and Sadge had never seen so many stoppage's like they'd had this past month. Yes, it happened now and then, but this was getting ridiculous. He pondered away to himself, as he flipped his knife end over end into the air above today's batch of Mr. Bill's Cat butter cookies, spread out before him on the motionless rubber belt. He deftly caught the knife handle, as he'd done THOUSANDS of times in his career, right before the point stuck into the rubber, then clipped a bit of extra dough off a cat's too-large-for-production-quality ear. “If I ran this place, things would be different. And we'd for SURE have some Opus snicker doodles, coming off the line.” Then again, he wasn't sure Berkeley Breathed would allow such a thing. He made a mental note to write him a letter.
His thoughtful reverie was suddenly cut short by a huge commotion over on Belt 32. Everyone on the floor was moving that way in one massive wave of humanity. He heard the talkative guy from Belt 13 tell his friend Belveeta, “it's Mr. Tibbs. He went through the line.” Belveeta's gasping, gaping mouth of horror reminded him of his lost guppy-fish on the kitchen linoleum floor.
Sadge's heart followed suite, and dropped like a lead sinker. He LIKED Mr. Tibbs. He'd been around for years. The scroungy, resident factory cat that wandered the floor day in and day out, searching for mice that should not be skittering around on a food-production floor. Tears welled up in Sadge's middle-aged eyes.
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He finally arrived at Belt 32, smashed center-long into the throng of workers, crushing him like a ball of raw dough. And sure enough, there was Mr. Tibbs, laying out on the belt. Sadge's heart sank to a new depth, “NOT the blending belt! He's a goner for SURE.” Nothing alive could survive the blending belt. Area 32. The new, Mixa-Matic 2700-XL Line. This was some pretty incredible, new-age machinery in the 'cookie biz'.
Sadge finally shoved his way to the front through the swarm of workers surrounding the station, to a place with a better view. A loud retort echoed from his lips off the concrete floor. “NO-OH!!” Expecting an industrially whisked, fully-blended cat...Sadge was amazed by what was laid out in front of him. Mr. Tibbs was just FINE. Splayed out on the rubber belt, surrounded by doughy, Mr. Bill's Cat cutout slabs in every direction. Though there was a curiously large arc of cookie blanks plainly missing, within paw's reach of the enormous Maine Coon. It was obvious. Old Fredd hadn't forgotten the butter. He'd TRIPLED the batch. Again. Just like a month ago Thursday. No WONDER Mr. Tibbs looked so happy. And FAT.
Sadge could swear he noted a wry smile, as the enormous mouser looked up into the human fray spread out before him on the factory floor. A relieved group-chuckle arose, as Mr. Tibbs happily licked the top of his front paws, then shoved them behind his ears. Amazing. The cat looked none the worse for wear, after such a long and harrowing trip through so many cookie machinations. It was a confectionery, true to the spirit of the world of bakers, assembly line miracle.
The ALL CLEAR blared on the klaxon in the corner, and everyone filed back to their normal place in the line. Mr. Tibbs jumped down once the belt started to move, and sauntered off toward the bathroom doors, no doubt happy with the promise of a long nap after 17,000 calories of wet, buttery dough.
The horn blasted it's two standard procedure, GET BACK TO WORK notes, and the line jumped back into full motion. Sadge took up his spot on Belt 47, slicing and dicing away at the cat-shaped dough, as it sped faster and faster past his station. He took a moment to look up during a short lull in mis-aligned ears, and glanced over into the corner of the factory. There was Mr. Tibbs, draped over the window sill by the bags of flour, sunning himself in the golden rays streaming through the grimy glass. The cat looked more than happy, doing absolutely nothing beyond sleeping off a whole year's worth of Industrial Blend, No.2 Butter Product.
Chuckling to himself once more, Sadge turned back to the belt to slice off a poorly formed tail, “I should talk to Mr. Grimby, about putting out a Mr. Tibbs cookie in our next batch run. Wouldn't THAT be grand?!!” Looking over again at the enormous, rotund cat now fast asleep in the corner, Sadge laughed out loud this time, “but who would buy a bag with only ONE cookie in it?”
Whrrrrr.
Schnick.
Schnick...
~ Finto ~
Five Minute Freewrite Post by @mariannewest
Post: Five Minute Freewrite-Day 466 - Prompt: Cookie Cutter
Thanks for stopping in and viewing another Twenty Eight Minute, 5-Minute Freewrite about cookies and cutters and cats and such. If you have any thoughts about factory work, hard jobs doing the same thing over and over and over again, work-based safety requirements, loud noises, fat cats, industrial butter, or anything else this post reminds you of, please feel free to comment away in the spaces below. I'd love to hear from you.
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Posted: 01/30/2019 @ 11:56
Excerpts From Late-Night Conversations With A Mechanical Cat
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Authors Note: The 28 Minute, 5-Minute Freewrite -- It's important for me to note these are NOT true, 5-Minute Freewrites. I DO set a timer, and write for five minutes. It's amazing how that little clock really gets the creative juices moving. And most of these writes come out as a pretty complete 'thing' in that time, though I do still edit. Those are put out as 5-Minute Freewrites.
However, the 28 Minute, 5-Minute Freewrite was invented to continue the story, on the backbone of the original 5 Minute'r. As the moniker in the beginning says, Sometimes you just gotta finish the story. These writes are edited and worked on. After all, this stuff may be 'out there' for awhile. Or at least until the cows come home to roost or be counted before they hatch. So if it looks like a duck and quacks like a duck, it just may be a story about a chicken sporting a rubber duck beak/mask thingy. It just took a bit longer to get there. -ddschteinn
What a great idea to continue your freewrite @ddschteinn. Maybe this could be a thing @mariannewest. A weekly or monthly event for all? I am not a fiction writer, but I think so many of our stories would be a great fit for this tactic. Freewrite is a flexible place, after all :)
It is and there are quite a few freewriters who are writing ongoing stories. That is also what November Madness was all about and March Madness will be coming before we know it...
I'm still not doing fiction though. Maybe I can do something with my nonfiction. We'll see :)
I do like the idea. It's sort of what these writes morphed into, and have become. Though in no group or organized fashion. Just in the land of DDS. The idea of taking the initial freewrite, which is an incredibly powerful impetus for getting an idea out and on paper in short order, to a different level. Using the original 5 minute as the cornerstone, then going on from there. I appreciate so much that @mariannewest is OK with this project morphing in this direction. I suppose it is all just about creativity in the end. The joy of the human condition, it can go all OVER the place. People are SO creative. It never fails to boggle my mind. So glad we have the Internet, we get to see SO much of it.
I think non fiction fits this idea very well, as well. Many of my 'fictions' are built on real stories from life. Sometimes with a tad of license (of some sort) thrown in for humor or to make a point, but the original was there. We all have so many life experiences to pull from. Some just seem more fictional than others. If that makes ANY sense. Thanks for stopping by and chatting and the support. I really appreciate it.
PS> I just noticed @mariannewest's comments below, I need to get with the program here....
Yes, @marieannewest is a good slave driver.
Recently I have made an effort to "push" freewrite when I see someone who writes well here on any subject. Few of us can succeed on steem without posting frequently, and this is such an easy post for writers.
I get about half and half replies between those who are intrigued and those who turn their nose up since they are pros. I am so glad I got pushed (shoved) into it and hope it will always be here.
It's a rare freewrite that is really 5 minutes for me, but fun when it happens. I am a hunter and pecker as referenced below with arthritis to make things more interesting. But still I persevere and EDIT too! If I can barely read through my typos, I will not inflict them on others :)
Very interesting read.. I love how easy it is to read and that the flow just goes so smoothly. And I'm in the awe of the fact that you wrote this in 28 minutes.. just to come up with this idea would take me longer and I would maybe finish writing in a couple of days :D
Well done!!
Thank you for sharing and have a great weekend!
Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed the story and it had some flow. Though as the discussion at the end says, these longer writes are edited. The initial idea and most of the story body comes out in a five minute write, or 28 at times, but then I work on it some more. Hence the extra time it takes. And different name. For some reason, a single @mariannewest word sometimes triggers a whole idea (like a photo does too), and it just takes off on the page faster than my fingers can keep up. Just depends on how the brain is working that day. And what the word conjures forth. Odd how this whole creative process works.
I realize many people DO only write for five minutes, and put it out 'as is'. I do those too, though I always edit, because of multiple use of one descriptor/word, mis-spelling, etc. I like it to be readable. And to me, it's all creativity, in whatever form you want to to take it. That's why I love this Freewrite, it is such a great motivator, and a writing exercise that really 'gets you going'. The sky seems to be the limit. Or outer space ( :
Cheers and a nice weekend to you as well.
Forget about 5 minutes, I could not write all of that in 28 minutes... Nope this would be an hour minimum. BTW typing was the only class I ever did poorly in... Never thought I would have a use for it LOL! How wrong I was. Glad to see you writing more... Always quite enjoyable!
Ha haa. I can relate. Sometimes the stuff just flows, other times it's like trying to stuff a feather in a bottle backwards. Though as I put in my disclaimer, nothing is ever COMPLETE after 5, 28 or whatever minutes. Everything needs at LEAST a bit of editing. It's gotta be readable.
As for typing, that is so true. That is one thing my Mom made me do in high school, at my great protest. How right she was. I am SO glad I took it. With my nifty ergo keyboard, I can usually fly. Which is great for story telling. Interestingly, creativity seems to be higher on a keyboard for me too. (vs writing, etc). A friend told me he thought it had to do with right/left brain and tactility of the fingers and creativity. Not sure the details, but there is something to it. (Though he never said anything about typing on a keyboard and keeping your COMMENTS short. Large sigh [HERE]) Can you touch type now? It does make it a whole lot easier. I thought about trying to learn Dvorak instead, to help with ergonomics, but you just can't teach an old dog to write with any system. (Sorry, got carried away here. You can tell I'm passionate about typing and ergonomics...) Thanks for the nice thoughts. Cheers, my friend, and happy Friday.
Not sure what "touch type" means actually. Sounds to be over my pay grade lol. I do a fair bit of typing but never did get over having to cheat and look at the keys.
There is something I find challenging about the blank screen of white just waiting to be filled with black letter then words. It is hard to put a finger on but there is something positive for my brain in the whole creative process, whether it be pics, words or video. I should try one of those speech to text programs one day!
It's within your pay grade, you just didn't get the memo. It got sent out with some ad's for kitchen sink cleanser. Easy to miss.
Touch typing is typing as a class would teach, with Qwerty or whatever, without looking at the keyboard, and using all your fingers 'as designed', rather than hunt and pecking like a barnyard beak-sterk, using only one or two fingers. Though I've known some writing birds disguised as humans that could type REALLY fast using only their pointing digits. So it does work. But the 'touch type' is a lot faster, in general. And after awhile, you know when you mis-spell a word, even if looking around the room while doing it. But it's nice too to be able to watch the screen as you type. Long winded explanation later, that's touch typing. Though on my vertical keyboard, like you, if I get 'off finger', I do have to at the keys now and then, to get back on track. Advantage of having a chair with arm rests. But with a vertical keyboard, you get a sore neck hunt and pecking back and forth.
[Stinky the Cat demonstrating how NOT to look back and forth on a vertical board]
I certainly can relate to the white screen becoming 'something' as you go or when done. It really is, as you say, a fascinating endeavour. And that creative 'spark' is so fascinating indeed. Things just get you jazzed up, as you say, photo or written, and often, the two combined. Amazing how one will inspire the other. Photo--writing, and writing--photo. Isn't this FUN?!!
Sorry, but you can tell I'm quite passionate about keyboards and typing and ergonomics and creativity that is leads to. And I had a LOT of trouble physically until I discovered some ergonomic things that changed my writing life. I really should do a post on it. "Get in line, posts, get in line".
Let me know if you every get the spoken to written ever figured out. HH and I discuss now and then how nice that would be.
OK, I am done now. You can open your eyes and move around and get back to whatever you were doing before studying the backs of your eyelids ( :
Have a nice Saturday.
Just when you thought Mr/ Tibbs was a goner, he tossed another Life card down.
I have to admit, DD @ddschteinn you have a knack for the most intimate of details, your tales are witty and charming. I admit that I am in like with your storytelling.
Steem on, my friend!
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That Mr. Tibbs, what card. And SO many lives beyond 9. Thanks so much for reading and enjoying my tale of the cookie cutters. I greatly appreciate your appreciation. And the tip. You are the best. Onward, to more stories and fun. Cheers.
You are always a pleasure to read!
Great stories, all three!
Thanks, so glad you enjoyed them. They're fun to write as well. I love this five minute write, even if I can't stay within it's bounds. But I suppose writing is writing is writing. I'm so glad @mariannewest puts this out. Have a nice night.
Love it! Congrats on the curie! Keep on keepin' on!
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Thanks, glad you enjoyed the story. And Curie is certainly a nice, unexpected surprise. That's always quite a lift, if it happens. Onward, to more stories of whatever comes forth from the mind of @mariannewest. Cheers
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Cookie... I'm on diet... I want cookies!
I would send you some, but they're only crumbs in a bag right about now. Sorry, but I'm pretty sure cookies are my favorite food. If only they were good for you. Sigh.
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Wow, thanks so much for the vote and support, I sure do appreciate it. As well as all the work you do to support the smaller folks of Steemit. Such a great place to hang out, talk and write. Cheers
Amazing...and what a fair weather steemit friend I have been...I'll get more reading time soon I hope.
Hello, and so nice to hear from you. I'm sure life is very busy there in at The Toad, with family and all. But I appreciate you stopping by and saying hello and the support and all. I'm sure life will slow down SOME day soon. We can always hope. Though it's nice you can still do some art. Keeps one sane and happy.
Hope all is well and keep on smiling. Cheers my friend.