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RE: Everything went dark – Prologue

in #fiction7 years ago

I guess if the cardinal rule of tension is to get your hero up a tree and then throw stones at them, you are certainly doing that. I like the sequence of being trapped, then escaping, then loss that has no time for pondering, then trapped again. Also, by setting this up as a prologue, you get away with the last line. Something other than the obvious must have happened or else there would be nothing past the prologue. Good work.