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RE: A Change Gonna Come - Finish the Story Contest, WEEK 32

in #fiction • 6 years ago

I was also surprised for the first person you adopted, it came unexpected after the inner monologue. I liked this character: not necessarily they've to be noble or pure for them to be appreciated by the reader. Like everything around him, his soul has been eroded by that thin dark sand.

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    Like everything around him, his soul has been eroded by that thin dark sand.

    Absolutely, a man embittered by the dawning realization that everything he fought for, everything he believed, is a lie. A bit of a gung-ho soldier type but well there are plenty of those about in this world. Simple people can be the best at instinctual activities.

    I was also surprised for the first person you adopted, it came unexpected after the inner monologue.

    Ha ha, yeah. I was just experimenting and I also love that POV. When it is done right it is awesome. Thanks for reading and your comment f3nix :-)