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RE: The Door Kept Shut

in #fiction6 years ago

For God's sake, woman... I don't know what your fear is, it's an excellently written story. Very descriptive (and... how did she say last night? Oh! yes! (no pun intended) ... expressive but easeful descriptions... You are a very elegant and effective writer)

Damn right you are!

By the way, your character is about to commit suicide.

Have a nice day

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Haha thank you, I did enjoy the descriptions and trying to create a relationship between them and an undercurrent of a story, but i am still not confident it worked as a mechanism to actually tell the story.

But hey I didn't say your Hugo was actually going to do that! 😜 Just the implication in your finishthestory of him thinking about it really hit home, the timing of the question, and the context of the conversation, made it seem like he was thinking about it as an option. But then you explained that it was just something you would ask, and actually most people maybe would wonder if the experience beyond the physical dying hurts. Although then I do wonder what the implication would be if we knew for sure. It's a good thing Hector gave him a vague answer, as always 😉 I had thought with the burden he was carrying, and the question Hector had asked him, that maybe if was something he had, at dark points, thought about before but I can be wrong 😜 Your fts was really good, you took us into the grit of a moment and forced us to think about things people maybe avoid.

#sbi-skip

Of course, He was thinking about that. His life was going to change, his job will be no more. Changes like that affect people.

People are usually habit beings. And many times it is traumatic for people who are used to working in a place for a long time and then lose that job affects their psyche. That is why this is a teaching that there is more life after that life. And that's what Hector came for. Hector is a representation of our positive side that drives us forward. Although I like to think of him as the guardian angel of each one of us.

You know all my stories have to hide a teaching