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RE: Sins of the Past (Space War, Part 8)

in #fiction7 years ago

Nice story @suesa. Your writing skills are superb. The beginning was full of suspense.

Fizckez hurried back home. She hoped that nobody had seen her. She would be dead by sunrise if any of the guards had seen her. They couldn’t know.

Again and again, she looked back, scared that someone was following her. If she led one of them back to the secret hide-out, they’d all be dead. All the progress would be lost.
Tightly pressed to her thorax, she held a small device, the reason for her mission. It could be the key to their freedom.

This got me asking a lot of questions though. This suspense was tight. I must commend your accurate use of words too. Maybe one day you might lecture me on the use of words. Nice work!