RE: Unwind ~ Remain
Mike is the main personality, Tim the protector and his sister - she was real - the caretaker. In my rush to finish, I skimmed over a lot and actually have a bit of an issue with the timing of mikes appearance or disappearance. His sister died, but from what I said about John I hope it is inferred that he had an affair with her, maybe more serious than the others before. Her also taking care of her brother would maybe have been dealing with a lot and John could have been the one there for her since she may have thought she could not be weak in front of Mike. I think the alcohol and belief that John is to blame for his sisters' death made Mike negligent and although Tim could maybe have exerted to stay more in control maybe he figured it is time Mike deal with it all and then take care of things after the fact as he may have done all the time.
I had gone back and re-read all four sections before that comment, and I didn't get that John had an affair with Mike's sister. I'm not saying it isn't there, just saying that it didn't occur to me as I went through it. I think I got so focused on Mike and what he had going on in his head with the drinking with Tim and then getting so drunk, that I probably didn't recognize it. That guy has some issues LOL!
Fair enough I leave a ton out from what I might think to write, sometimes I even think I wrote something that I did not because I tend to have a much wordier part in my head. I guess it is the only way I can pretend to even have an interesting story through abstracting it. So the confusion is perfectly natural.
This is why I thought it is not out of place to assume John had an affair with Mikes sister:
and ends with
and before that John said enough which cause Mike to go into listing mainly transgressions to do with woman. So I thought well I could write a 200 word backstory or since we have established that John fucks around I can tie it together via "thankful for this job" which is what use to support her saying that Tim should be the one that is present at work, and also why Mike wanted to come out more after her death... By the end a person would then maybe connect the "take her" as being his sister which he gathered was one of Johns woman , John gave Tim the job which gives him power so to speak.... Meh not sure if that makes sense. But that is basically how I thought about it and then wondered how do I say that without saying it haha.
And nope I don't mention her before the end at all so there was nothing previously that would indicate it.
Fair enough, I will keep in mind that it is quite a reach thanx for mentioning it. :)
I remember reading that line now, and I thought when he said the "you had to take her too" part, I thought he had done something to harm her, or maybe he had killed her but escaped being charged.
But now that I think about it you had earlier written something about him messing around with interns, and before Mike got the knife he was saying those kinds of things. So the clue was there, I just didn't pick up on it. I went with unexpected violence for some reason. :)
It helps a lot though because now I know not to be too vague. Thanx.
You're welcome. I think like most things, being vague once in a while is a good thing, and in some cases, it's even preferred.