Hi, @sbamsoneu
Excellent friend, I enjoyed reading the new version and even more the condensation requested by the task.
That narrator- witnesses makes it great, connects us with what he believes was his mistake and anticipates an unimaginable ending. Congratulations. I value your way of writing.
Now, I go with the qualification.
Where is the title? In a micro -story, it is part of the story.
The healer character, who is given to us now is very well-developed and is magnificent, earned his story and place.
The other is your reflection. I would like to meet the author, behind the story, what did you learn from this exercise? What really led you to leave behind Amobi?
But personally I believe since I read your first story, it's him, Amobi; To whom you have to give voice. In that order, I am thinking of assigning you a special task for your graduation.
You will receive my telegram. 😉😂
Task 1: 2,47/3 pts
Although I’m learning new things from this new micro writing… your task isn’t easy at all. I can’t imagine how hard the graduation task will be…😂😂
I remember the first week I saw the contest, I was so excited that it will be easy after all is just to write in 150 words.. when I started it, it took me like 2-3 days to compress my work to 150 or 100 words. I almost gave up in task 1.
Now I’m tasked to write in 60 words.. is been 2 days and I’m still working on it…😂🤣😂