RE: I write from different perspectives
Without losing my respect for you, Mr. @dove11,
I really like your pictures, seeing them makes me more interested in reading.
In the first story, the narrative of the lazy ant is very clearly captured, but in the terms of this course we are not allowed to have other characters in the story, the ant is the only character. So, I think you can change the way you tell the story to make it seem as if the ant is speaking on its own behalf, it could be an expression of anxiety, fear or hope. The key is to explain as if the ant is speaking to someone else.
In the second story, it seems that the ant died first, and then he read the letter. I think it would make more sense if you described the ant that received the letter reading it while it was still alive.
In the third story, the impression I got from the inscription on the tombstone was about the mistakes the ant made while it was alive, so I think it would be better if you provided a narrative about what the buried ant can be proud of.
Beyond that, I'm sure you can find a better story and I'm not saying that mine is better, I'm just sharing what I know.
I respect you and your words sir. I am sorry I lost my respect by my useless story. However, I am not allowed to change it now so I will try to follow you and post mine only after reading yours in the coming week. Thank you so much for guiding me.
"Toda traducción es una traición". Creo que algo falló. Tu talento como escritor salta a la vista. Esperamos seguir contando contigo en el taller. Un abrazo.
En un taller, la retroalimentación es fundamental. Mejoramos a partir de los errores cometidos, eso es lo más valioso que tenemos los seres humanos: Errar y enmendar. Gracias por tus aportes. Un abrazo.
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