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RE: Mi personaje en la Sipnosis

Hello dearest microwriter :)

You have already received excellent feedback from joslud and you are exceptionally good at making your story so wonderful.

I don't have much to add really. Since it's a requirement from the challenge, I would only say: It might be helpful to note that the character’s reactions and dialogue could benefit from a bit more emotional depth or insight into their internal thoughts. This would add further complexity to their personality and help the audience connect with them on a deeper level.

I would use smaller sentences in my story:

Kariley climbed the mountain. Her heart beat rapidly. The wind whispered secrets but the mountain stayed silent...

You don't have to listen to me of course. It's just my perspective or what I would have done :)

Wish you heaps of luck with your challenge.

#microwrite04 @joslud @solperez

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Saludos amigo, Por supuesto, no tienes por qué escucharme, está parte me causó mucha gracia jejejeje, no tienes que decir eso, ya que estamos para aprender, más bien estoy agradecida por tus recomendaciones son muy buenas, las tomaré en cuenta, me encantó que leyeras mi post y dieras tu apreciación, gracias por tus deseos, Bendiciones.