Aftermath - Hip Hop/Rap :) Enjoy! 💚

in #music7 years ago (edited)

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  • Shitty headset microphone
    Vocal by: positivity420
    Beat by: Schneiderhan Sounds - check him out here

(edit, i forgot to put lyrics)
LYRICS:


(HOOK x2)
Why do people draw, what have people drew?
erasing the lines and drawing brand new.

they're makin a path, changing the view,
what's the aftermath? if only we knew...


(16 bars)

What is our purpose and what is our role?
Could you be quiet, I wanna hear your soul,
looking in your eyes I see a black hole
the destiny of ours is written in the scroll

a million stars are lighting up the sky
a million scars is why I get high
are you living a life or living a lie?
are you giving your best or giving a try?

pain in my chest, when I said goodbye
life is a test but eventually we'll die
there's no minimum grade, no cheating, no bribing,
everything is paid, what am I describing?

nature gave us all,and what do we do?
we built a wall, invented the shoe
lost contact with surface, a lot less friction
we all have a purpose, we all have a mission


(HOOK x2)
Why do people draw, what have people drew?
erasing the lines and drawing brand new.

they're makin a path, changing the view,
what's the aftermath? if only we knew


(16 bars)

forget the past, but not lessons from it
you can live fast, but enjoy in the moment
we only live once, no second chances,
as long as I got pulse, i'll question the answers,

if you're ever down, don't think you're not special,
if you're ever cocky, don't think you are special
This path is mysterious, so is our connection
if i am delirious, I'll ask you for direction

money ain't evil, it's the poison souls that have it.
world was never evil, evil people ran it
we could be brothers, or we could be enemies
good to each other, or cutting our extremities

doing my thing, even if i'm solo,
if i'll have bling, once i was so low,
didn't hit rock bottom, it smashed me in the head
things i always thought of, things I never had


(HOOK x2)
Why do people draw, what have people drew?
erasing the lines and drawing brand new.

they're makin a path, changing the view,
what's the aftermath? if only we knew

Stay positive, driven and keep spreading those good vibes! 💚 Love from positivity420

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The lyrics and beat are nice. Only thing is you seem "insincere" when you read the lyrics. You have to find a way to draw out emotion so you're rapping sounds more "sincere" and "powerful" because I really like it how it sounds but it sounds like you're sleepy and that turns me off and no doubt turns off other people.
Hope u found this criticism constructive!

Thank you for the advice my fellow Steemer, I appreciate it, I tried to stay linear because a little movement in my head makes distortion in sound because it was recorded on headset microphone, I will try to bring more emotion without distortion of my voice, maybe I find a way to cut out the distortion, thank you again for the criticism! :) I would love to link you my other rap session, but dsound has trouble with 7 days older music... at least for me :/

Go man, don't stop :D

Thank you :) I can't wait to get a proper mic, then it will be music to lose it :D

Cool lyrics bro :) some nihilistic input there and all bit of OG in there but all in all you write some mean lyrics 😄 mic check mic check...

Bro, you always give me so many new terms to study, I didn't know what oligarchy is until you mentioned it(yes I remember) nor did I know what nihilism is :) Thank you for that, even in a compliment you spread the knowledge! Thank you, I give my best to spread values and mindfuck, as well some hard truth here and there through lyrics :) Old school bro, old school!

love the lyrics. that is all i can say about rap music :D

Thank you for tuning in :) I understand completely, rap is mostly to just enjoy and leave you speechless :D

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Šta da ti kažem,a da bude nešto novo :) tekst pun pogodak, za mikrofon nemoj da brineš, bitno je da ti slažeš rime, radiš ono što voliš,a i ide ti dobro. Mikrofon će doći i nemoj da te to brine, bitno je šta poručuješ. Samo napred i kao uvek podrška od mene.

Hvala puno, mikrofon ce doci kad vratim lerove hahhaha. Bitno mi je da ljudi shvate poruku hvala ti brate 💚

Very nice lyrics, amazing actually, good job!!! This will be my song of the day 💚

Thank you I am honored as I am not any popular musician 💚

Could you be quiet, I wanna hear your soul

Fireeeeeee in the house. You killed a beat, this thing is very special my mate. You rock, just keep on going and as I said I'm waiting invitation to the stage 🔥

Thank you my friend I am glad you enjoyed it. Definitely! You beatbox and I'll say a bit of wisdom hahahah

Sounds cool haha

If there is no struggle, there is no progress. Brilliant work my friend! But these lyrics...left me speechless.

Thank you, my friend. Good thing you can write hahha :) Jokes aside, it means a lot to me, thank you!