A nice poem. Nonetheless, i think you should work on your visualization. A more picturesque approach can help define the peripherals of your poem and give the reader a more vivid scenery. But still, wonderful work. I expect to see more of this, perhaps better.
I appreciate your honesty. I wrote this poem a long while ago (6-7 years), and like to think that my writing has improved since. I am a believer in 'less is more' when writing, the reader (usually) will conjure a scene in order to fill the ambiguity left by the writer. In this particular poem, it was an ill-begotten attempt at designing the atmosphere surrounding this peak. The next three poems I am to release are far more metaphorical, complex, and offer vivid imigary for the reader - I think. :)