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RE: Puddle Duck and Puzzle Duck
I think it depends on the emphasis you place on different words and the rhythm you're reading it with. I think it works if you read it like "Why some things that are fun...". This line did go through a few iterations during the process, you might have preferred some of the others but I also had issues with them in terms the emphasis and rhythm not being necessarily coming through clearly.
As the poet, it first has to work for you.
Also, I do like how you brought several things together with that post -- poetry, doodles, computer drawing processes, game theory, walking.