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RE: Unfading.

in #poetry7 years ago (edited)

I think you want to edit the first line from "We went" to "We were." I really loved this - it's full of emotional warmth and the vivid energy is transfixing. I felt that the first stanza was extremely strong. It's a real pleasure to read and reread.

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