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RE: Once I loved a girl and told it not

in #poetry7 years ago

I really enjoyed this. I thought your rhyme scheme was clever and appropriate. I really like the last line of the first stanza where you say "festering and spreading" - it's always fun in poetry to have words with the same vowel sound to both have a semblance of rhyme while also carrying forward your point. I also liked how the poem ends with how it began.

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Thanks mate. appreciate it.