Rhyming Diary January 11: A night walk through the woods

in #poetry7 years ago

This is part of my new (and open to everyone) challenge "Rhyming Diary":

https://steemit.com/poetry/@okramer/the-rhyming-diary-challenge

January 11

everyone here goes by car
even when it's not that far
while pollution is increased
their asses become chubby and obese

All this driving makes me sick
and I won't be a part of it
with my flashlight and my pole
I did a little favor to my soul

Since this village has no hoods
I walked an hour through the woods
It was a dark and windy night
but finally my heart shone bright

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This was pretty cool man. You easily made me see what you were writing about, which is good. Would've switched "to" to "for" on the 8th line. Other than that I really liked it man.

Thanks, comments like this are very helpful! English is not my first language and those little mistakes slip in, ruining it for everyone who speaks English well.