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RE: A GOLD MOUNTAIN

in #poetry7 years ago (edited)

This poem was more interesting in its own right - the message delivered and the images evoked. I could picture the madman's eyes sprinting, sensibilities lost to his lust for gold eons prior. A creature of desperation - Kind of like the Wild West and Gollum from the Lord of the Rings had an illegitimate child. ;c)

Also - I couldn't help but feel that there is a song in there somewhere.

Interesting. Thanks for sharing.

Steemit allows you up to 5 tags. Use them all and use them wisely :cP Perhaps #goldrush or #mountain might have worked well?

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Hi there, @pathforger, thanks for your comment!

I've already updated my post to include these two tags, so I guess they might help? Who knows!

It's not like I'm expecting a huge readership on here anyway.

Regarding the imagery - I must have written the original as a metaphor for trying to find inspiration around oneself, which is why I tried to do the translation in a similar manner. The connections to the Wild West and Gollum are more than appreciated! :) :D

As for there being a song in there somewhere - I guess that's up to your ears and musical abilities. Perhaps the poem has a certain sing-song rhythm (which I doubt, but still).

Sorry if I'm being a bit negative, it's been a long tough day.

Have a good one!