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RE: A New Crypto-currency On the Steem Ecosystem

in #smartmediafutures6 years ago

Thank you for participating in @sndbox's challenge, in association with Utopian.

I must admit, I was not blown away by your concept. To me, the beauty of SMTs is the way they - along with the Velocity HF - extend Steem beyond its current bounds, in a variety of ways. And we've had some great ideas in that respect in response to this challenge. While the idea of bringing people in to Steem is good, and recognizing milestones with rewards is nice, neither seems to me to require a token of its own. You can do all of that with Steem and SBD.

I also found the post itself lacking in terms of style and grammar. I'll cite some examples:

  • "New innovation has over time been a traditional religion on steem, with many Apps, projects and communities ice dancing on the steem floor." While that is certainly a delightful visual metaphor, "has over time been" is not correct. Maybe "has, over time, become" would work. But then we get to it becoming a "traditional religion" and I'm confused all over again. Because... it hasn't? Also, you didn't capitalize Steem and did capitalize Apps and both are wrong.

  • "Now with time on the rise heading to the close of the year, the buzz of Smart Media Tokens on steem heads to hit the roof." Time is on the rise? In what way? And the second half of the sentence is so convoluted. Simplify, simplify, simplify. Lemme do a quick edit: "Now, as we head to the close of the year, the buzz surrounding Smart Media Tokens on Steem is about to hit the roof."

  • "As much as propagating the steem gospel seems massive, many might get stocked on redundancy over the process of time." I know all of these words, but the second half of this sentence seems like a random collection of them.

I'm sorry if this comes across as harsh, but this post was difficult to read. The writing seems ambitious, but there's a lot of wasted effort there. Simpler, clearer writing would have served you and the readers much better.

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Your view is massively appreciated and not seen to be harsh in anyway.

What you said, has been received.

Thank you for your review, @didic!

So far this week you've reviewed 8 contributions. Keep up the good work!