Awesome feedback @poetrybyjeremy, this is exactly the kind of response I'm looking for on these posts. It helps out an awful lot.

I think you're right about the use of dashes and semi-colons. It's something I don't use them much and it would help my writing out a lot of I understood where to use them.

I'll get an edit done shortly and make the changes! Just getting myself some food.

Thanks very much bud! This is great.