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RE: [Short Story] - Stalker

in #tellastorytome6 years ago

The perspective is so well established in the first few lines, even without the title it is obvious that it's someone watching when they shouldn't be without you needing to state that. The early twist, from a more sinister watching, to a tender concern pulls the reader in, feeling that with him. The reader is left just as anxious as to what he may find inside. Then the sudden conflict of emotions upon seeing her, getting closer, already seized by the compulsion and unable to stop, brings the sinister element back. There is such a beauty swing back and forth like this throughout, instead of trying to walk the line, this alternates between almost sweet and realistically scary. It's impossible not to get caught up in his fear and panic as she wakes, and I found myself really hoped it was her knocking on his door, but the ending is even better, swinging full back to creepy as now, he has the time to plan that next time.

The winners of round 11 have been announced and round 12 is out - very much hope you will be back to thrill me with another entry <3

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Thank you so very much for this comment!
And yes, plenty of time to come up with his next step ;)