The first attemtp with a story call the reflection

in #venezuela7 years ago (edited)

Hello everyone, i'm from Venezuela, came here out of curiosity and looking for a way to escape from our obscure reality and to be free for at least 1-2 hours reading stories and comments about anything else.

So, apart from the internet, i'm making a story/book/sci-fi tale when i have free time (that mean weekends mostly, thanks work), i like to read a lot and i always wanted to write a book or stories or something, and i tough it will be a really good idea to share with you all to see if you like it, or if i'm doing well, or maybe i'm totally bad haha, you can be free to say anything

anyway, here you go, hope you like, is call the reflection:

February 6. 2024

  • You have it?
  • Of course!
  • Ok, let's go……

For me, an "unknown" couple, only info i have of them is what we have in our database, junkies, male, 25 years blonde, female 32 red hair, my visor show up the 100 % match with the photos, maybe they are not perfect for me but in their little world they probably are really happy right now.

Those are the toughs that will get you in problem Evelyn, get your mind on the sight.

  • Remember, we need at least 1 alive, we need information.

Hearing that voice, i remember how much i hate to be watched every moment.

  • Ok, ready.

Hearing the bullet ride trough the barrel i just saw part of the driver's head splash over the window, the car crashed against the light post and it was all done in seconds, immediately there were around, with they white suits, everything planned to be just like that.

  • Perfect, you can come back, you job is done.

Who we are to decide who lives or die?

when i get to the street i hear the sirens and the people peeking up info with their phones and cameras, i wonder, is this satisfaction for them?

When i get into my car i hear voices and sounds into my transmitter, no match on the databases and cant turn it off.

Suddenly, a plain silence.

  • What the….

  • Hello Evelyn.

Somebody hacked my inter, that's all i can think….

  • Don't try anything, as you can see, there's not more sound, only my voice, no sirens, no people, just you and me.

It was true, like i just lost my perception or was inside a room with this person.

  • You don't know me, but i know you, i used to said that all of you scumbag shit of the police were the same, but with you...you are different...and i wanna know why, i want to reach your mind, i want to save you.

  • What do you mean? – i was giving up to the moment, the silence feels confortable.

  • Believe or not.. i'm very different than you, i'm pure human

  • I'm too

  • No you are NOT! you are just a PUPPET, an object to be use when someone need to, tell me, how does it feel?

I just went silence, unable to find an answer

  • You nervous? i bet you will pay anything to get to your home and open up that bottle with all those colorful pills, don't you?

  • What do you want?

  • I told you, i want to save you

Save me? why?, for what?, started to feel a headache

  • Why me?

  • Don't get upset, remember, i'm here for you, next time, think about that before you follow your orders

Right after that he disconnect, all the sound surrounding me comes back to me in a wave and i almost jump out of my car's window.

  • Need to get back to the station..

End chapter 1

So, that's it, what are you toughts? do you get curiosity to know more about the story? how do you find the narrative? any sugestion? feel free to comment and thanks in advance! see ya soon!