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RE: Clearing

in #writing7 years ago

Your descriptions pop vividly as usual. Nice description of the "hairless chest" to show his youth and apparent innocence. I liked the violence when the boy died, it held the most impact for me, emotional, not overly punchy.

I don't know if it was intentional but after the line "three quick steps" and kill the boy in three sentences. Nice.

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Totally not intentional, but I love that you saw this!