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RE: A Swansong - The Impact Challenge Contest

in #writingimpact7 years ago (edited)

ooof... those last few lines. This is no lighthearted poem Inna! But there's a muted, exquisitely painful beauty here, grave as faces in a vintage black and white photograph before people smiled for photos.

The sense of being on a journey... of moving back and forth through memory, revisiting what has in theory been left behind, but in reality remains present whether acknowledged or not. Documenting the little unseen tragedies that line the protagonist's life, and in doing so obliquely referencing the larger, overarching one until a picture of it begins to come clear, each little detail like a marvelously elegant antique.

A missed opportunity can be a wound that never heals. What possible cure could there be?

I love that this question remains mercilessly unanswered.

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I'm told I don't really do light-hearted....though one of these days, an older, wiser me might find all those elusive bits of light to hold on to. But for now, even a silly poetic exercises turn dark of their own accord. You, sir, have a way with words. This comment - so much beauty here. And wisdom. Holding on to this one for a long long time.