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RE: A Swansong - The Impact Challenge Contest

breathes in the distant smoke
of oil dripping on wood

I loved a lot of the way you used the words, especially this image. It gives it such an earthly feel to it. The progression of the poem was well-executed, with innocence turning into darkness and robbed innocence/childhood. That was impressive to use all fifty words, yet keeping the poem as a cohesive piece! Well-done.

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Thanks kindly, Jeremy :-) I am kind of stupidly proud that I got all them words in.... The last few kicked my butt.

I guess you had enough of them and kicked their butts into the right place, eventually ;)