Thank you for your engagement and this exchange of comments.

I appreciate how you've added context, conciseness, and brevity to the piece. However, I wonder if the evaluators might find your ending unexpected! Or they are satisfied by the twist they are looking for, in your story. To be honest, it feels like trying to fit an elephant into a fridge. If you review my task, you'll likely spot countless discrepancies—yes, it’s true.

P.S.: It’s always easier to point out others' mistakes/shortcomings, yet we often struggle to evaluate our own work objectively—perhaps because we’re too familiar with the backstories we’ve written.

That’s why these suggestions are not meant to imply that I’m a better writer or that I handled the task more efficiently. This was simply a friendly exchange, prompted by the requirements we were given.

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